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Jason. by ~Lucky14:iconLucky14:

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The liquid falling
Past her cheeks
Are the whispered
Words he speaks.
"Put my heart
Around your wrist
And tear it up
With my last kiss."
Embracing him
Her faith shatters
Letting go
If all that matters.
"I'll wear your heart
Like jewellery
And your last breath
Will murder me."
"As you leave
Whisper our song
And as I escape
I'll sing a long."

She shakes her head
Lost in despise
Ingnoring Jason's attempts
To compromise
Aumtun's lost
In her disguise
Through the mask
Shine empty eyes
From her ashes
He will rise
Back to reality
Trail her lies.
©2006-2009 ~Lucky14
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Author's Comments

More planning for the story I used to write.

This is the first time I've tried something like this and the rythmn chnages a little halfway through, so any C&C is appreciated greatly.

Thankies!

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~perfectlieflawed Feb 10, 2006, 11:20:43 AM
as always, this is beautiful. i love the lines

"Put my heart
Around your wrist
And tear it up
With my last kiss"

and

"As you leave
Whisper our song
And as I escape
I'll sing a long."

child, you have a beautiful mind, and you never cease to amaze me.
great work! keep it up! <3
:iconlucky14:
~Lucky14 Feb 10, 2006, 11:26:09 AM
*squeak* Really? Thank you so so much!

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~The-Violent-Messiah Feb 10, 2006, 12:15:08 PM
omg this one is so lovely Stevi !!! if i werent looking after a small child i probaly would have cried, this one is so so good Stevi <3333333333

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</3 Heart Break Generation </3
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~LorynJ27 Feb 12, 2006, 3:01:35 AM
I agree, it's really good Stevi!!
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~ThisLonelyPlace Feb 13, 2006, 7:34:59 AM
although it's phsyically impossible I want your babies D=

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like a thousand lies bleeding out of your heart, burning in the night
:iconlucky14:
~Lucky14 Feb 13, 2006, 8:02:11 AM
X) Should I feel flattered or scared? *feel flattered* Thank-you!

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.:Amy.Hit.The.Atmosphere:.
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