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All back home... by ~Lucky14:iconLucky14:

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All back home,

I don't know how I woke up here
Or why the siren's playing,
I don't know when I'm can come home
Or what the warden's saying.
Common sense tells me
I've done something more than wrong,
So these bars will be my prison
To the end of the lawsuit's song.
I don't know how I got here,
Or why Morgan dissappeared,
But right now I feel trapped
Claustrophobia choked in tears.
The police are unforgiving
And the frost decides to stay
You need to come and rescue me,
So I can escape the convict's way.

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©2006-2009 ~Lucky14
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Author's Comments

'tis bad...I can't write when I'm just told to. Writer's group created this...but I figured I'd post it. C&C is welcomed.

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~perfectlieflawed Feb 22, 2006, 10:37:52 AM
very interesting, great work!
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~Pineapplelover Aug 22, 2006, 5:21:14 PM
writer's groups are fun ^^ not many people can rhyme and still write good poetry anymore, but I really like this one! "and the frost decides to stay" is my favorite line. It seems a bit out of place among the other lines, but at the same time, is perfect. Does that make sense at all? lol. Good job!

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making the world a cuter place, one toaster at a time.
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~Lucky14 Aug 23, 2006, 7:49:26 AM
It makes perfect sense. =)

Thank-you very much!

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